Thursday, April 10, 2014

Week 3 Corrections


Buyeo is located in the middle of Korea.  There is not very famous. But I'm very proud of my hometown.There is very important place in history. There was a capital of Bakjae. There is so many tourist attraction.

 

I grew up Incheon. There is a major traffic point. because There has international airport and harbor

 

There is a major traffic point.

There is a major traffic point.

 

Conjunctive adverb       because.    Conjunctive adverbs join two sentences.

 

There is a major traffic point because it has an international airport and a harbor.

 

I grew up Incheon.

I grew up in Incheon.

 

 

Because I'm an introvert, It is hard to speak in English to someone.

Because I'm an introvert, it is hard to speak in English to someone.

 

 

If anyone wanna play soccer with me, just tell me!

Form    third person singular subject + base form + s or es.

Wants to

 

Wanna    not standard written form

 

 

My merit is that I am prudent.  Because of this merit, I don't make a rash decision.  But, ironically it is demerit that i have a lot of things on my mind.

that i have

capitalize I

incorrect use of a conjunction

Ironically it is a demerit that I have a lot of things on my mind.

 

 

And my another Hobby, computer games.

 

 

 

 

 

 

I like suddenattack so much that i played all day long last year.  So i couldn`t studied well....... But i really like my school. aren`t you think so too?

 

But i really like my school. aren`t you think so too?

 

Tag questions ask for agreement.    

 

Positive statement / negative tag question

Negative statement / positive tag question

 

 Negative tag question / positive response

Positive tag question / negative  response

 

I really like my school.  Don’t you like it too?

 

 

 

 

 

 

My favorite movie is ‘Dead Poets Society’. So My motto is ‘carpe diem’ that mean seize the day.

 

My favorite movie is ‘Dead Poets Society’, so my motto is ‘carpe diem’ that means seize the day.

 

 

I’m from the south korea. I grew up in a state called Gwangju.

Capitalize the names of countries.   South Korea

 

Some countries use ‘the’ in their names.  The United States, the United Kingdom, the Philippines, the Czech Republic, the Republic of Congo

 

I’m from South Korea.

 

state called Gwangju

wrong word state

city

 

 

 

When I get diet, I do some exercise ( jogging etc ). At this time, I loose weight and my body get more healtier.

 

I get diet

I go on a diet

 

When I go on a diet, I do some exercise, like jogging.

 

Like, such as, for example

 

I loose weight

Wrong word    loose

lose

 

my body get

form

gets

 

more healtier

form of a comparative adjective

healthier

 

 

 

When the opportunity, i wants to do boxing later.

 

When the opportunity

Missing subject, missing verb

 

Capitalize I

 

Form

 

When I have the opportunity, I want to do boxing later.

 

How to be healthy, first, I evenly eat a lot of food.

 

How to be healthy

 

Rhetorical question don’t need to be answered.

Don’t use rhetorical questions.

 

I evenly eat a lot of food.

I don’t understand the meaning of this sentence.

 

I should exercise every day, because These days Increased my body weight.

These days Increased my body weight.

These days I’m gaining weight.

 

 

 

 

Jogging and push ups on the night

Get up early in the morning.

To ride a school bus

Eat slowly,eat evenly

 

Jogging and push ups on the night

Missing subject / missing verb

I go jogging and I do push ups at night.

 

Get up early in the morning.

To ride a school bus

 

I get up early in the morning to ride the school bus.

 

Eat slowly,eat evenly

Missing subject

I eat slowly.

 

I like every exercise and activity! so I`m enough healthy

 

!  comes at the end of a sentence, not in the middle.

 

I`m enough healthy

Word order

 

Adjective + enough

Enough + noun

 

I’m healthy enough.

 

I don't now why that deleted. Sorry to Proffessor So Now I replay to write assingment.

replay to write

rewrite

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